I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Neha, this post was a really interesting story and had some surprising moments. I liked how at the end you put in the part about the note, but make sure to double check your work.
Hi Neha, I really like how you create mood and atmosphere in your story. I agree that you need to make sure that you double check your work. keep up the great work. By:Ana
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Hi Neha,
ReplyDeletethis post was a really interesting story and had some surprising moments. I liked how at the end you put in the part about the note, but make sure to double check your work.
Hi Neha,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you create mood and atmosphere in your story.
I agree that you need to make sure that you double check your work.
keep up the great work.
By:Ana