I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Great job! I like how you got creative with your characters and started with an onomatopoeia. I agree, this giant does act like a little boy! Maybe you could try to add more adjectives and similes to your story.
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Good morning Neha! :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I like how you got creative with your characters and started with an onomatopoeia. I agree, this giant does act like a little boy! Maybe you could try to add more adjectives and similes to your story.
Kind Regards,
Katherine