I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
My name is Zana and I am a blog commenter from the Summer Learning Journey.
I really enjoyed this haiku activity as I love to read poetry and I think haikus are a very fun form of poetry with their syllable rules and simplicity.
Your haiku is well written, you followed the 5, 7, 5 syllable rule perfectly and I think your theme is very relevant to summer and this christmas season with the sun rising early in the morning. I really liked your final line “flowers are waking” . It is a beautiful message and your image relates and adds depth to your haiku.
What was your inspiration for this haiku? And may I encourage you to step up your work by writing two more haikus and even include a clip of you reading them aloud.
Keep up the great work and I hope to see more of your posts over the summer.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia Ora Neha,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Zana and I am a blog commenter from the Summer Learning Journey.
I really enjoyed this haiku activity as I love to read poetry and I think haikus are a very fun form of poetry with their syllable rules and simplicity.
Your haiku is well written, you followed the 5, 7, 5 syllable rule perfectly and I think your theme is very relevant to summer and this christmas season with the sun rising early in the morning. I really liked your final line “flowers are waking” . It is a beautiful message and your image relates and adds depth to your haiku.
What was your inspiration for this haiku? And may I encourage you to step up your work by writing two more haikus and even include a clip of you reading them aloud.
Keep up the great work and I hope to see more of your posts over the summer.
Ngā mihi nui,
Zana Yates